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Old 07-26-2004, 04:58 AM   #1
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This is a link to the prologue of a story I'm writing. I accidentally put it in the wrong thread. Silly me.

http://www.writingforums.com/viewtopic.php?t=5318

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Old 07-26-2004, 07:09 PM   #2
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Would it hurt to just post it here, Links can take a while to load, and you'd prolably get more response if people didn't have to link to see your work...
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Old 07-26-2004, 09:01 PM   #3
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Please do post the story here.

I like what you have done with the start, of it, but I do agree that it could use a litle bit more content. You have described everything so well with the adjectives, that not a lot has been said for the length of what you have written. What is there may tie in with the First Chapter, but, I'm not sure right now. Thats the main thing, make sure that you have enough in the prologue so that the reader understands what is going on in the first chapter, rather than wondering why the prologue was even there.
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Old 07-27-2004, 03:51 AM   #4
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I thought posting the same post twice might count as spam.
The first chapter should be available soon.
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