Needtoimprovemywriting

Hi i need to write a narrative based on the following four topics. i just need some ideas as to how i can write a brief, but interesting story out of the following topics: 1. we learn the most from those closest to us..... 2. certain experiences can mark the beginnings of maturity...............3. people can be influenced by their environments....4... people can create their own reality

Please help! i appreciate it.
Sorry for the irregular format.. i'm just in a hurry

Nazareth

4: Mob dude creates his own reality by using force to get everything he wants

3: Rich dude stuck in Ghetto, or deep woods environment, can't get out due to storm, has to fight to stay alive- He aint used to this new survival experience- He's totally out of his element.

2: Rich woman's Daughter rebels- takes ff, marries a dirt poor dude- both end up on street, mother finds her, learns about life on the streets and the homor system that goes along with such a life- it's a different honor system than the one she's used to & she learns to respect those she once turned her nose up at. She matures beyond her snooty selfish self-righteousness.

1: Father saves estranged son from the mob or from gangs, Both had hated each other before this, but both learn new respect from the touching sacrifices they both make during this situation.

Needtoimprovemywriting

thanks.. but i was kind of hoping to write a narrative which would touch all of the above prompts..

Needtoimprovemywriting

Im thinking of sticking with number 3, instead i'll write about a rich girl lost in the woods......
thanks!

Needtoimprovemywriting

This is what ive written so far:

Here she was, standing in the middle of nowhere, surrounding by nothing but trees. It looked like it was going to rain heavily. Perhaps, there would be a thunder storm, she thought. With panic, she ran feverishly, hoping to find shelter. Then she saw what looked like a inhabited cabin. She pounded on the door of the cabin, in hope of someone letting her in. A man dressed in rags opened the door. There was a deep, but welcomng silence. Two minutes later, the man said "Come on in," with what seemed to be a welcoming gesture. She didn't know whether she could trust him, but in weather like this, she had no choice. She was a rather rich girl, who believed herself to be on top of the world......................

How do i make this to be a brief narrative
with introducting aspects of
1. we learn the most from those around us
2. experiences mark maturity
3. influence from environment
4. creation of one's own reality

what are some incidents that i can include to introduce such aspects? Please helpppppppppppppppp

any help would be appreciated!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Cora Windover

1: two minutes is a hella long time to be standing out in the rain - you try standing still for two minutes. I'd say Twenty seconds is long enough for a significant Moment.

2: don't state that the girl is filthy rich and believes that the world revovles around her - show it in her attitude towards the dirt poor guy.

Lol... I love how filthy rich and dirt poor are both dirty... lol... but "filth" is a much more high class way of saying "dirt" a ha ha ha ha.... I love English.

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He's not the man who sired you; so marry who ye will.

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Needtoimprovemywriting

lol
thanks

this is the kind of criticism i need
i need to build a solid narrative and by steps like urs ill be there in no time....
thanksssssss

Kermie04

I totally agree here. I couldn't have given my advice better then Cora. I'm just courious though, is this narritive for school or just something you want to work on? It doesn't matter, I am just wondering!

Kermie04

I totally agree here. I couldn't have given my advice better then Cora. I'm just courious though, is this narritive for school or just something you want to work on? It doesn't matter, I am just wondering! Let us know if you need more help; that is what we are here for!

Needtoimprovemywriting

Thankyou guys so much
Unfortunately i completed the narrative, but my teacher says i should redo it.

And i guess i will....in time to come

I do appreciate your help kerme!