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Old 09-18-2003, 06:33 PM   #1
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This is a piece that I've been working on. It's suppose to be done as a spoken word piece, but I want some feed back on how it flows and whether you can read it in it's current form. I will apologize for some of the language in advance, however I would like some feed back....thanks


I got all the feedback I needed for this one and I thank you.

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Old 09-18-2003, 07:07 PM   #2
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Besides the use of language, I really liked this... I'm sure my friend Vince will like it too, fore he is a big fan of Rap and Hip-hop, I don't listen to that kind of music too much though. Anyway glad to have you with us. I think this was very readable, just a few miss spellings that I could pick out!
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