TheListenerAndWatcher

I have problem with trying to write with one of my charactors. His name is Sicza, and in the story he's got this entity that speaks through him. It just comes out whenever he lets, or uses the Vark(will be replaced with dark as history continues) Cast. I'm only having problems trying to describe this, like should I say it's Sciza's voice, or a second voice, but the thing is I want to keep it a secret. Sciza only thinks he's going crazy.

Please Help!

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Der Teufel-Wolf

A little more background on the story might help. Is this Earth, or a fantasy world? What race, nationality is Sicza? How tall/ short is he? What color hair? How do you see his in your mind's eye?

Sometimes writing a character bio outside the actual story helps develop the character.

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Vivid_dreamer

I LOVE this angle you've presented here for a story. [Conflict: man vs himself] And I think the name 'Vark' is apt and you should keep it (mainly because any name involving the word 'dark' is cliche]. You could just explain somewhere (while in the mind of Sciza) that he refers to the Voice of Darkness as 'the Vark.' I like the idea of a character like this, with Turretts-like behavior. All you have to do while writing the dialogue is when the Vark says something, you write, "the Vark said." Then Sciza has to deal with the trouble/conflict this has just caused him with the other characters in your story. Then you just have Sciza 'explain' in his own voice, with the dialogue tag, 'Sciza said, "What I meant was...."

Hope this helps. Terrific character idea!

-JKSC

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WriterDude

Going silghtly off-topic, think about StarGate. The bad guys (goa'uld) are small parasites that takes over a host's body, so they only have one voice. However, there are a "rebellion" of some sort that only accept people that willingly becomes hosts, so this host and the parasite co-exist in the same body. Sometiems the host speak, other times the parasite speaks. It's easy to tell which one speaks as the voice changes when it's the parasite. Maybe you could do something like that? Maybe someone comment his voice being a bit different, or he say something he usually wouldn't? The eyes tend to glow occasionally as well, but that's just a minor, pretty cool detail.

On a side-note, what do you mean by keeping it a secret? A secret even for Sicza? (as he thinks he's going crazy?) If that's the case, how can the entity speak when he lets it? Do you mean keep it secret from the reader? If not, you could simply say Sicza when he speaks and Sicza/Entity when it's the entity that speaks.

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TheListenerAndWatcher

Der Tueful Wolf, I'll get write on the Bio. Thanks for that one.

Vivid Dreamer, Thanks for positive comment on the charactor. Also, I can't use Vark for that, it's already known as the Six Element created by the Heavens, mistakenly. I could do that but, then I would have to refer to it has something else to call it. Also, Sciza can only here the voice of the entity when he feels negative emotions, and it can only talk when Sciza uses the things Vark protection spell. During this, his skin covers in a tar-like substance, eyes turn red, and his voice becomes deeper and more menacing. Thanks!

Yes Writerdude, I want to keep it a secret from the reader and Sciza, because the entity doesn't want to be discovered until the time is right. I can't do the voice thing, because of what I about the protection spell, there voices sound the same. Thanks!

I'm also going to try what you said, but I think I'm going to be using 'the voice in his head' or something like that alot. either that or find something to call it like Vivid said.

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