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Old 02-21-2008, 09:03 AM   #151
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He slammed the work down in front of me and pointed at the obvious error in my hypothesis. "Its not like that, its like this."

Before I could reply he was off, tearing a strip off the next student.

This is a jarring sentence, clumsy and lifeless. It would read smoother if it was written like this:

"Do you ever check your work?" he asked, handing back a paper full of red marks.
Know what would be smoother? An empty page.
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Old 02-21-2008, 09:05 AM   #152
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I wasn't aware that "description" is the same thing as "flowery prose." James Joyce might have had something to say about that.
So would Lovecraft and Eliot. And Yeats.

Ignore Truth-Teller, he's retarded.
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