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- query letter; The Worst Robot of Them All
- What does this "it" mean?
- Vegas.
- Chapter 3 "Mermaids and Sparrows"
- Assasin
- 1st Article
- Editor
- Pareidolia
- Question/Exclamation combo (!?)...to be avoided?
- NanoAugustomo full length novel: Warship
- some advice and critique needed
- Dragonya - Book One: Edgar, CH. 1: Solitude
- 5 Paragraph essay on Fate and Oedipus Rex
- Death of a child.
- I want to write
- Testing Reader Response
- I've done everything I can for this guy.
- Attempt at G rated material
- Idea for a High School Story: Original?
- The Canopy
- Short piece (885) - Any help appreciated
- This is just an intro, tell me what u think!
- The Confinement Effect - Preface
- They Could Be Anywhere
- I want to write a story
- Please Critque This / Chapter Three
- Writing in present tense -
- Period Piece - Plain and simple
- Who long should a chapter be ?
- Prologue, fantasy/adventure/young adult, 600 words
- Something A Bit Less Intense
- Angelus: The War of the Will
- Tips for condensing?
- Short Stories
- Not sure really what to classify this as, but it's an intro nonetheless
- Using flashbacks as part of the storyline
- First novel, First chapter, First 1,500 words
- The Cross-Country Kid
- Darkness Unknown.
- Conceptions : Should it take the paranormal/supernatural/psycho thriller route?
- Would you class this as science fiction?
- cindy
- This is not a love story; in hopes of severe criticism.
- A dream that might turn into my new project. 1300 words.
- The Battle
- The Battle
- Sci-fi action story
- Second part of story. Please tell me your honest opinion.
- Stuff I wrote on holidays
- Luckless, Colorado: The very beginning
- Just started on this... Tell me what you think so far!
- Chapter Two- Critiques/Thoughts?
- Why Your Mom Hated Me This Summer
- How to become a ninja
- Snap-Dragon Snare
- Project II - Sci-Fi Period Piece
- Punctuation Question- Quotation Marks
- An Alternative Love Story
- Possibly a childrens story - definatly fantasy
- It's called "The Dragonfly"
- Lucid
- [Fantasy] Pact - Revision + part II
- Unfinished Fantasy work. (Bloody!)
- Bane of Barons.
- In Death..
- My first attempt at writing a novel sided peice
- What do you think of these couple of sentences?
- First attempt....
- What do you think?
- Spirit In The Grave [working title] (excerpt)
- Decent foreshadowing? Or overdramatization?
- untitled.. for now
- Banishment of the Aesir
- Secrets (A little Something)
- "Smalltown High" - The Series
- Eclypsed Generation-X
- The Whole Story
- Open for all opinions, Decropolis, Chapter One
- David Lynch
- The Wishing Well
- _"DICTIONARY BLUES"_
- Editing Help
- Too Philosophical in ending?
- Boy picture for book front cover, illegal???????
- Risque Content unnecessary?
- Opening chapter - any good?
- Introduction, Boring?
- A Daring Thief
- The Red Dress
- storm
- Sanlitun
- Cycling
- Would you keep reading?
- A Daughter's Last Wish
- First chapter of first attempt at novel
- Strippers serve a purpose?
- The Final Dream Series: Need Criticism!
- Where do I go now?
- Project : Angel
- What do you think? The beginning of a mother-in-law tale
- [Fantasy] Pact
- Fantasy, Chapter 1, Seeking feedback
- Advice and Help need for creative writing assignment
- Exciting Ending
- I'll Skip to the Best....
- Hook?
- Jody
- Changed the plotline, still too "done"?
- A.L.I.C.E
- Just a few sentences...
- The Story (1)
- A Family Reunion
- Query Letter
- Start of a new idea!
- Loss of the English Language
- Black Albatross Inn
- Too much dialogue?
- Happy Hour At The Fossil.
- The Jobless
- Finished novella: Hedonism vs. Faith
- Beginning chapter; 1400 words.
- Superfine - 800 words
- A small chapter a wrote ages ago
- The Dream - tell me the worst
- Scene written, rewritten.
- Beginnings of a Book (kinda long)
- Story with prototype title
- The Glass Windows.
- book description
- Gems Gems Gems... Pearls? (Fantasy book)
- I'm Nervous
- Really Need My Lyric-Writing Skills Assessed
- Critique needed please! New here
- The Loose Button
- Short story, begginings for a novel, PLEASE CRITIQUE THANKS
- critique my sister's article
- Theme on Humanism
- let me know what you think...seriously I need it
- Introduction: the Hall
- How do U write or describe a fight sceen......
- Balance - fantasy/horro
- The Imperfects
- Ghost Serenade (Beginning of Chapter One)
- fantasty comedy looking how to improve
- Magical artifact in a fantasy
- CTF Chapter 1
- The Interview
- The Dark Presence
- Pretty new here, a beginning for your sage advice
- Beginnings
- Subtle Romance?
- Does this do it for you?
- A children's story
- Looking for critique (no title yet)
- The Grand Bazaar (working title)
- Best word pictures or funny quotes?
- Need Advice about plagarism
- PrologueII (No title)
- What do you think?
- Free-hand skills
- Synopsis of Third Chapter
- Query letter.
- Tabula rasa - causes and cures.
- Anticipation Always
- Cocheta's Journey C22
- Prologue (No Title)
- Knight and the Bells (Working Title)
- I need help - this is where ive been told to come :D
- Friends & Family
- Help needed with theme
- The beginnings of "Moirae"
- A Second Chance
- A free time writing
- Untitled (at this time)
- Shade of Green
- Staying Alive....Vampire Fiction
- Story I just started
- Mortimer (first scene - about 1500 words)
- Untitled fantasy-beginning
- Highway 28 - chapter 1 first draft - 2800 words
- 146,000 words; is it too much?
- Michel Kinglon
- Untitled fantasy piece seeking harsh critiques
- loves desire
- loves desire
- I can't get started
- letters: effective?
- please critique: chapter 1: Buzz Off
- 'Been Done' Syndrome
- Story's Acknowledgement
- Cocheta's Journey
- Advice on my story idea
- Any grammarians lurking on the sidelines?
- Quick grammar question
- Chapter 1: Imprisonment
- Untitled - Small chunk
- Backstory assistance
- Prologue: to write or not to write?
- A crime scene, does it work? (1757 words)
- Story Expansion
- Fully formed backstory; lacking an actual plot. Want to help?
- Please critique - Start of longer work
- Neopets Story
- Short story/Diary entry: care to comment?
- Chaptor I: The Dream(needs help)
- The Void
- The Ara Trilogy (fantasy)
- Hell Inc - Part Two
- A small background piece.
- Critique/Comment Prologue So far..
- flashback violence for your viewing pleasure
- "The know-it-all", initial snatch--69 words
- FEEDBACK SOUGHT: A little snippit of today's labour.
- Critique&Comment on the beginning of a story, please?
- Children's Story--please r&r
- opening
- Disillusionment (Short Story, Rehashed 1500 words)
- Critique sought on an untitled piece
- Trespassing with consent
- Translation of Music Into Writing
- Where the Writers Walk
- Do you have to be a reader to be a writer?
- writing session 01 (please give feedback)
- brain fart, do these sentences work?
- So, prologues...
- Recombinant Text (Can this metaphor fly?)
- Yankee Point
- Summary of - THe Elaphe Initative... Comments?
- Madness at the pay toll.
- Highway 28 - start (500ish words)
- The Party (short story)
- One Day In Class (short story)
- The analogy of my sycosis
- Chapter one: Archer of Kalamine
- Chapter one: Archer of Kalamine
- A use for cardboard cut-out characters?
- The Bright Side
- Excerpt/Introduction
- Enzeru - Chapter Two
- Critique sought - characters, and more.
- a problem
- Is passion about your topic necessary?
- Does it even make sense?
- Story telling vs Reader imagination
- OBSESSION
- Soot. Would love advice/critiques!
- The German (Horror - 1000 words)
- My novel - complete chapter 1 - approx 3700 words
- Weekend reading
- Little help here