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- An Opening Scene
- A scene of dialogue
- The Pain (short)
- New Query....need critque
- A possible new work, looking for advice?
- Need critique of story
- Maybe a silly question...
- Corny,cozy romantic ....
- Global Warming!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
- Last part of my essay
- Critique Essay on Influence
- Alone -
- The Monster--I'm a beginner
- Short story I want to publish!
- Before it all began
- Wrote a story, but need advice on how to turn it into something presentable.
- My Savior - Chapter One
- I was writing my first chapter of my novel. And I wanna know how I'm doing!
- DeKoven Street
- First Year College Student Seeking to Improve Writing--Tips?
- Trim the Tree -- 722 words
- Excerpts From A Junkies Journal
- And then there was one- (lacking structure) This is the start of my first short story
- I want to write a news story for my novel
- A short experiment
- Necessities
- Help on Personal statement
- Short Story Idea, comments?
- Dialogue. " HELLLLP" vs "help" he yelled.
- Cure for undue restraint?
- 350 words, short and descriptive bit of scribble
- Using Present Tense ? - Future Fiction Novel
- Pale November
- 160 characters only; advice or examples please
- Proofreading
- Train tracks: A Very Short Story
- How Imaginary...
- 1,2,3
- Short 1st Chapter. Crits away!!!
- First story im 17 and drunk like all aspireing writers
- 1st Chapter - V. Long (I'm new please be gentle...)
- Concept
- Flight from normalcy, some random stuff that I ended up liking
- Lesbian Mattress / 1500words/mature
- The Griffin War - I need some ideas for this
- Deadly Determination {{First Chapter||Critique loved}}
- My Future Book 1st Chapter
- The Cosmic Twister
- the dead
- Muse (a lil less that 2000 words)
- Essay On Ray Bradbury
- New Book First Chapter- what do you think honestly!!
- I've got a question about characters
- Something I wrote this morning...
- Jesus Loves Whores
- Apostrophe Help
- (post)Apocalypse
- The Golden Waterfall
- My story idea.
- Looking for feedback on a small piece
- 30 Nights Of Day (really, really temporary title)
- The Catacombs - Short Story
- Flash fiction - Jimmy tries to make a sale (203 words)
- Earth (wip, this is just the prologue) - 838 words
- My 4 year old, 24 chapter story.....
- Legal advice needed here. . . NSFW.
- Be gentle with me
- Please help me get into college
- Intro to Coffee and Nicotine (working title)
- Critique on Intro Needed!
- The first gig (quite short)
- The Hidden Genius
- Critique my story please
- Waltzing in the Shadows - Chapter 1
- Crack Rocks and Devil's Weed
- would you read this?
- good intro?
- Which story idea should I choose?
- Medievil Fantasy, 430 words
- Advice on Brief Essay
- another college essay
- HELP!!! CALLING EVERYONE!
- poetry - backseat
- Advice on a location
- Hello, need some tips
- Need some tips about sci-fi weapons and improving modern weapons
- The Sales Chart
- College Essay
- Interview with a thieving orator.
- x-post ch1 part1-cutting
- United Coalition of Nations (UCON)
- Help a female become a surgeon: critique of personal statement requested
- A Materials Darkly
- Need ideas for races in a fantasy / sci-fi novel
- Badon Hill
- Thoughts and feedback please (just under 1000 words)
- term paper
- Does this catch your attention? (Potty Language)
- A quick ? Calling all English teachers.
- Research Paper/ Use of "I"
- Schizophrenia (Super Short)
- (story based on norse mythology) Where to go from here?
- The Checkout Lane
- Is this beginning good? Acceptable? ("Scar")
- Getting to the interesting bits
- Need advice on alternative magic in a fantasy world
- C&C My D&D Journal?
- What do you think?
- Memoirs Excerpt
- Your thoughts and advice?
- Need help with intro paragraph!
- Good Looks
- Bitter Sweet Withdrawal
- Would this hold your interest? (Fiction)
- Critique? (1st section of 1st chapter, 1,583 words)
- On Thrillers
- How To Do Drugs: A Short Story
- The Grim Reaper's Clean-Up Crew
- Life, Death, & Traffic Lights
- Another twist to the star vs Stalker story...opinions needed
- Critique Please - about 1200 words -
- The Creaky Shack (Offensive Language)
- Middle-aged love
- The gift (short story)
- Dycemaster: Cain and Abel
- Plot Idea- Too contrived?
- Scarla
- Is This Realistic?
- i need a bit of help
- Does this fantasy-opera work?
- The death of my parents
- Pablo Cortisone And The Faeces Of Eight (Part One)
- Siberian Heat
- First time writer...need help
- Story plot and first chapter
- Psychonaut
- Badly needed critique
- Jim Visits a Sex Shop (warning, sex toys are described liberally)
- And The Boy Found God...prt1 (Adult content)
- Well this is something I've had brewing for a while...
- another chapter from a diffrent novel
- chapter from a diffrent novel
- First chapter of my new novel tel me what you all think
- This is my beginning - Chapter 2 part 2
- This is my beginning - Chapter 2 Part 1
- I started the story. I hope you all like it.
- "Winning and Losing"--short nonfiction, seeking critique
- A Rough draft of a start to a Screenplay
- fiction novel and publishers
- What do you think (im not happy)
- Works Cited ?, and ? about internet citation
- More of my Madness - Adult Content As Before
- Advice on the Hook
- My short story so far: Fields
- This is my beginning
- Arthurian Fiction
- Idea for a Novel - Opinions?
- Genesis opening
- 900 -- A Quick Read
- Terrible Pun
- First time fiction
- Chapter one: In search of Identity. ( I seek opinions/critiques)
- How would you break out of your own grave?
- To Set The Wrong Things Right
- Beginnings of untitled work (1000)
- Need a few comments on stories for a collection of short stories
- Is this any good?
- I quit.
- Please help and check it, tell me what is wrong with it...
- Four: Chapter 1-fantasy (need some feedback please)
- a short narrative (1000 words)
- Need help with one paragraph.
- Story concept: The Thinkers League
- Sonnet ‘Drought’
- Advice Wanted:
- Detail
- Short story: 904 words
- Romance an sex in science fiction
- Everyday Maddness And Other Reasons To Die
- The Wall - Short Story, ~1,200 Words
- The Aegean Sea - Humanity's Fate
- Help with my pitch....please.
- Short story intro
- Rewrite: Intro, A little time for a little advice
- Million mile an hour Ghost - does it work?
- What Should I Do?
- *first post* De-virginized, my first attempt at a short story...(463 words)
- Where Does My Story Fit?
- Hi, everyone I'm new, I have this story idea. I want your opinions/ideas/Advice
- Driving cars is Illegal (Part of Chapter One - 250 words)
- Opening Pages (Sci-Fi novel)
- Silver Sun Rising - query
- On Japanese honorifics in fiction
- The Widow (beginning)
- Waltzing in the Shadows Query/Sybopsis
- Please, chcke it up for me and tell me what is wrong with it...
- Is this clear enough?
- (question) Beheading
- Just wanna see...
- Blackouts. Short story, slight supernatural elements.
- Knowing when to fill in the gaps
- Short peice of writing for critique.
- Phase
- Detail on objects
- Does this make you laugh?
- Apathy on Ice (critiques welcome, praise even more so)
- A few short chapters from Failure Saga
- A short film screenplay
- What Names!
- kidnap Story ideas
- EXPERT advice required on style content and puctuation
- High Noon
- I have an idea.
- Adults in kids' fantasy?
- To You, My Heart Goes Out
- once upon a time
- Sad ending? Happy ending?
- Children of Heaven (8,284 words)
- The Courage of Feeling Out loud (355 words)
- reviewing your own work, feedback appreciated
- Alair story, chap 1
- X-Con - Chapter 1 (First Draft)
- Chapter break/general advice
- Chronicles of Dust - Review
- COMM210 Speech - How to Upgrade a Computer
- Twist - Chapter 1: Gunpoint [it's long!]
- Just A quick one
- first chapter from Transients
- First Chapter -It was him or me
- Snow-covered Grass, and Other Ghosts
- Eve of Azure
- NaNoWriMo Project
- By the ways - some help
- Transition - 508 words
- Out of Control(600 words)
- Adventures of High School Chp 1
- Prologue, around 1600 words. As yet untitled Horror story
- mneumonics
- Latest book - Waltzing in the Dark
- To be critiqued...please
- What am I doing wrong!?
- Not another Catcher
- The end of the party
- The Death of an Aerodrome (deep breath: 45,000 words)
- Cut-Throat -- Flash Fiction -- 252 words
- Cold Shower Journalism.
- its all about what the sole wants
- Now just why the heck should I bother save the world? Screw the world, I say.
- The Hero-The essence or The cliche?
- Writing like a broken record