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- Title for me?
- The Long Walk Home - 1200 Words
- Title advice
- Need forum Advice
- New to this, looking for a critique of my opening paragraph.
- Story Idea and introduction. (Prologue?)
- Misty Negotiations
- Will you guys read my 1st ghost short story and critique it? "The Haunted Car"
- this is some disturbin stuff I wrote
- Critique my
- I'm sorry to bother you all, but does this piece sound a bit disturbing?
- semicolons?
- Short Story
- Going In - Chapter 2
- How far are you willing to suspend your disbelief?
- Short Piece of a Novel That's Undergoing A Second Draft
- Short Story Second Version - milky baby breath!
- Aggregate Asylum
- switching the character you follow
- Untitled Scene 782 words
- Untitled Scifi free write 2154 words
- My first attempt - Childrens' Literature
- Please give critique to my book " Secret of Dinah " (book about magic, witches)
- Short Story - advice please
- comfort
- Critque, Please: For an Entry
- "My Light" A short poem.
- Conversation before the battle
- Chapter 1- PLEASE CRITIQUE
- the characters of life (a children's story)
- College essay - suggestions?
- Going In - Chapter 1. Be brutal, please.
- Introduction: To The Nethernox Archives
- Please critique "Transitions"
- Can anyone look at my piece and see if the dialogue is natural?
- critque my college essay
- Just Another Day
- Need Help With Prelude
- Short Story Assignment- Romance
- Short Story (700) words-- Comedy
- 500 word class room assignment
- Chapter One
- Expression
- Lost in my rain
- Sabriel or Lirael?
- Late Night Conversation (Thriller, Short Story)
- Lost and Found - Short Story - Romance
- New-Hello
- Yet to be titled (profanity)
- Shifting voices and perspectives; good or bad?
- Posting online / Publishing?
- First attempt in a while...
- i'm gay
- The Place(some profanity)
- Mind Of Fire
- Faith a poem by Jared Lieske
- Invaded.. (500 words, first part of a longer story..)
- Perspective (466 words)
- Need Help With First 2 Paragraphs
- A Shaman's Bounty
- Grimoire - fantasy fiction
- the attic
- I Do Not Have A Space - thanks for the help
- Using a narrator as prologue
- a porcelain child
- Fall From Grace - Outline
- the characters of life
- Superman (600 words)
- A rework of the short story Betrayed. Is it any better?
- Yet to be named
- Quest Idea's
- Story Dilemma
- Outlining a plot...how far do you go?
- Is This Going Anywhere?
- Peoples Power
- An excerpt from my story, Le Vampire Rouge
- Excerpt from one of my stories.
- I have many books in my head which one is the best?
- Evil monster
- I wrote a children's book, how can I get it published?
- my little skant paragraph.
- Mathmission - quick critique
- All I Really Want ~ Short Story (Third Draft)
- First post in a LONG time! I'd love to hear opinions..
- First post in a LONG time! I'd love to hear opinions..
- Story opening. Opinions Welcome.
- Chapter two needs need harsh constructive criticism.
- *sigh* So many stories to write, so little time. Which one would you prefer?
- Opinions gratefully received! Gracias
- Need to get the ball rolling
- What do you think?
- True Monks-A Sci Fi story
- Homeland--A Fantasy Novel
- urgent! please give me your opinion on these paragraphs will do my best to repay u
- Lįsdan: Fantasy Novel
- Starting a story...advice please
- Hangman (temp title)
- I don't know if this is legal. Advice, please!!!!
- Her Man (v short story)
- two poems for rating.
- Our Hands
- Why
- Disappearing Cycle
- Beautiful
- ghost story title
- Sam Profit (around 800 words)
- 1337H3Art
- Black Muscle (Intro Help)
- It's what those little sods in the corner think about me.
- Some criticism and avice for a medieval/fantasy story (2,175 words)
- Looking for a word
- Free Money and Hot Chicks Inside, Click Me!
- Judge Me, Judge Me Not
- Moon
- We Fight for the Fallen - 400 words
- Gandhi Essay
- A simple poem
- Need feedback, critique on presentation of Transcription of Sermon, Please *8400 wds.
- Steven; The safari man Pt. 1
- Revision and Thoughts
- the start of something, dont real title yet. (sci fi)
- random snippet that popped into my head one day
- just look
- Each Death Has its Place (2k short story)
- Question from a new member
- I'm sorry can you please revise and critique my piece. This is so hard.(7000wrds)
- Being- very short fiction
- Ask to meet with hometown publisher?
- Theme and the opening
- 'The Company of Others' beginning needs criticism
- Walks of Life (short story)
- are colons optional
- Criticism please~
- Help in punctuation
- a play about religion not yet finished
- Fallen angel(needs critique)
- Need advice on possible non-ghost solutions to a ghost story
- Fantasy writing practice Clip, roughly 2000 words, critique much appreciated :)
- Action Scenes?
- An idea I've had for a story/novel, wondering if it's been done.
- Short Story final draft, please criticize, good, bad, anything!!!
- TAKE ME WITH YOU, criticise the crap out of my story please!
- first chapter
- Experimenting...
- Can't decide
- Doctor-chapter 1
- The Trip
- Help with game monologues
- Characters & Story Structure
- Doctor Idea: Finished Prologue.
- Aftermath
- Definition Essay - Gamers
- Help! I'm having trouble describing!
- The Byron Tryout - be gentle...
- Need advice on how to end a prologue
- Critique on Memoir/Essay - Spit and Polish 2550 words
- Duality
- fantasy - is this story opening too cliche?
- The start of something...
- From the Darkness
- My Journey (descriptive piece)
- Shang Hu- all help welcome
- Children's writers help wanted
- The Adventure Continues - The Bigwigs and The Smallbergers Continued
- My attempt at a fantasy satire
- The Bigwigs and the Smallbergers Children's Book Draft
- Sequel to Most Dangerous Game Critique?
- Faith and Society Paper Critique?
- Help with all of it lol
- Can anyone help with my query letter?
- Quick Question - query & genre
- where do i go from here?
- Easter Legs - advice welcomed
- Mother Mary's Marauders (Fantasy, mental warfare, adult language)
- Whimsical Fantasy (a sub-genre?)
- To Have Loved and Lost (2nd draft short story)
- Monsters
- In need of a fresh perspective. (Critics Welcomed) be ruthless
- I need help writing my story, Im having Writer's Block
- Mystia-I am still learning and need help
- Immortals Edge
- Saturday Poker - 1700 Words
- The Steel Storm-(Sci-fi / satire?)
- Openings
- The Black Death and The White Reapers (Concept)
- Tell Me What You Think - Advice
- the real one
- 5 AM
- Is Training Essential
- Would you read on?
- begining of a short story
- The Dead Boy and the Rose
- heh, why not
- Sequel?
- A Creation Myth
- My first attempt at writing, critiscism needed!
- The End
- Quick essay advice
- A Opening Scene that I'm trying to write, critique on writing style much appreciated
- An Opening Scene
- A scene of dialogue
- The Pain (short)
- New Query....need critque
- A possible new work, looking for advice?
- Need critique of story
- Maybe a silly question...
- Corny,cozy romantic ....
- Global Warming!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
- Last part of my essay
- Critique Essay on Influence
- Alone -
- The Monster--I'm a beginner
- Short story I want to publish!
- Before it all began
- Wrote a story, but need advice on how to turn it into something presentable.
- My Savior - Chapter One
- I was writing my first chapter of my novel. And I wanna know how I'm doing!
- DeKoven Street
- First Year College Student Seeking to Improve Writing--Tips?
- Trim the Tree -- 722 words
- Excerpts From A Junkies Journal
- And then there was one- (lacking structure) This is the start of my first short story
- I want to write a news story for my novel
- A short experiment
- Necessities
- Help on Personal statement
- Short Story Idea, comments?
- Dialogue. " HELLLLP" vs "help" he yelled.
- Cure for undue restraint?
- 350 words, short and descriptive bit of scribble
- Using Present Tense ? - Future Fiction Novel
- Pale November
- 160 characters only; advice or examples please
- Proofreading
- Train tracks: A Very Short Story
- How Imaginary...
- 1,2,3
- Short 1st Chapter. Crits away!!!
- First story im 17 and drunk like all aspireing writers
- 1st Chapter - V. Long (I'm new please be gentle...)
- Concept
- Flight from normalcy, some random stuff that I ended up liking
- Lesbian Mattress / 1500words/mature
- The Griffin War - I need some ideas for this
- Deadly Determination {{First Chapter||Critique loved}}
- My Future Book 1st Chapter
- The Cosmic Twister
- the dead
- Muse (a lil less that 2000 words)
- Essay On Ray Bradbury