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- my opening with a transition
- Shunin: Blade of the Devil
- Musings of the prodigal son returned home
- I am hoping to publish this poem soon. Hoping it will do....
- Twelfth Strike (UPDATED)
- Character Analysis of Daisy from The Great Gatsby
- School essay; need assistance.
- Romeo Must Die
- Cass Holding Strikes Back, Verbally...
- The use of 'that'.
- Boy in a Bubble
- Kali Tradition. "I would like to know if this works??&q
- More Thanmortis.
- Carrion Field pg. One
- The Final Hours
- Joshua Cross - a rudimentary opening chapter
- The Final Hours
- Today I woke up to hear a buzzing sound in my room
- McDonalds Psychic
- Columbine in 215 words [so far]
- HELP!
- Mark & Clark (Chapter 2) ~~ You know what to do ^_^
- Night Rose
- The Battle of Thanmortis.
- The Organization (added more 2/17)
- My first short story!
- My First Long Short Story... Let me know what you think...
- Needing grammar/content help on short Description essay
- young adult short story
- First Battle
- One=Ugh
- Suicide note (rewritten)
- Life Untitled (2)
- School Of Darkness
- The end of the world (updated 2/16)
- begining a work to improve my writing - please C & C
- Assassin (valentine's day update)
- By the Cold Clear Waters (Re-envisioned)
- Help! Which perspective is this written from?
- Mark & Clark---~ Need Adive.. LOTS OF!!! Not good.. I kn
- Please review
- Blue Eyed Euphoria, chap. 2 (short)
- My first speed write
- Forever - Prologue
- Hello everyone can anyone please check out my essay
- deleted
- Umbrellas in the snow (new ending)
- So good or no good?
- Mind Blood -- Stream of Consciousness
- Help?
- Started today.. Don't know how to.. piece together.
- Dialog
- Marian's Angel(working title): Chapter 1, part 1
- English Professors
- deleted
- Kitty Kisses
- Critique Away...
- Telling her how I feel.
- A Certain Slant of Light-Revised 2/8/05
- Is this a monologue?
- For Freedom and glory (update 3/15)
- By the Cold, Clear Waters (tentative opener)
- Stanley Kowalski
- Stockings
- Imprints in the Sand
- new sonnet -- does it work?
- Pointers on dialog?
- Furnace
- Confessions
- Roses...
- His Days Are Numbered...revised
- An Untimely Chain of Events...
- Suggestion for posting.
- Chapter One: Dark Prophecies
- Proof Read Topic Sentence
- Screenplay: The Lady in the Painting.
- Afterwards
- Opening paragraph. What do you think?
- First stab on these forums...
- First Tear - Please critique!
- All I Ask
- The Hill - Please critique.
- (Now much more than) An opening paragraph....any good?
- Endless Tides - please critique.
- A superior species - Please critique!
- A monologue, please critique!
- What happens when the ink runs dry?
- To Kill a Queen--Added More
- FRENCH RESISTANCE STORY pt. 4
- Short story -- Muse
- Short Sci-fi story
- 2491: Commencement of the Prophecies, A Story Line
- Hello
- Humor piece
- Mean tricks
- Potential?
- Tales from an Urban Cockroach - Chapter 5
- Chapter Fifteen in the Cass Holding mystery novel
- Critique for a report
- Prologue for new story (314 words)
- The Atlantic
- Shunin : Blade of the Devil
- To My Love
- Try Again (Opening)
- Three-part thesis statement
- Little something
- New to writing - critique would be great
- what's your take?
- Looking for Opinions/Critiques
- just started this today... worth continuing?
- Guilty Until Proven Innocent
- preventing awake
- On Her Way...
- new writer feeling unsure
- Request for Critique/Poof read
- 1st written work shared here (medical descriptions feature)
- Mindless chatter of freedom
- some future war story
- A Certain Slant of Light (The Real Chapter One)
- Fairpine (working)
- sonnet - lovely dream
- the best feeling
- The Words Just Stopped....
- untitled
- How Hamlet Got His Groove Back.
- A little help would be appreciated
- Chapter Fourteen
- Geoge Orwell First Timer
- End of Chapter Four... But first...
- Untitled [revised]
- Dimond Blades. My first real story
- Awaiting Audry
- ~WANTED-----> help!!
- Aztec
- Inevitability for Sale
- Keepers of the Dark
- Help on an Assassination
- How am I doing so far?
- Angel
- Bowling for Bush
- monster2
- whaddya think
- From the Zeppelin Project File (1935)
- Tasty Waffle
- Metamorphosis of Narcissus
- my monster
- Short Story
- Part draft
- Snake Eyes......My First Post....This is for a class
- Faith is wasted on his name
- In dire need of critique!
- My first Real Story! Yay!!!
- OK...Im a big boy, critique this.
- Chaos Gate
- Granny
- Looking at the photo…
- Untitled
- A Therapist's Confessions: Blue Eyed Euphoria
- As I walk in...
- Alone - My Main Novel
- My very first novel-type attempt---*profanity*
- Life Untitled
- hidden from view.
- Skipping characters between chapters
- The Extra Element
- Threshoulde opening needs help..Maybe..Probaby..
- "Information Dump" Question
- Viewpoint-'Depth: Compelling Evidence of a Deeper Hole'
- 'All's fair in love and war...'
- Deleted - moved to Fiction
- Advice on improving my novel
- My dear friend Mr. Shadow (parts 1 and 2)
- Letter to the Reader
- Pain
- Maddie and Tristen
- opening to story (one curse word and one death )
- Introduction+ 1 Chapter: Suggestions and help needed.
- Title Choice -
- Process of Admission p7-End
- The first bit of my novel... I'm working on revising it.
- The Lady in the Painting (story removed)
- Process of Admission p4-6
- Opening of "The Art of Regret"
- 42 words- an extract from the beginning of a story
- A sad intro- Him
- Opening for first novel by an old writer - does it hook you?
- Process of Admission (WT) p 1-3
- A Certain Slant of Light: Chapter One (Continued)
- Character Paper
- Novelliffic!!
- A short humour column.
- My Duke of Edinburgh Expedition! (story bout a big walk!)
- Galvanizing Saturday -- Chapter 2 (PG13)
- First chapter of my novel. Please read and criticise
- Galvanizing Saturday-- Chapter 1 (PG13)
- (untitled story)
- Lonely
- A Short Prose - Beauty in a Beastly Life
- problems choosing first peron or third person
- Just a small scene
- Begining
- The story continues. Critiques welcome.
- Zombie - Short
- please comment
- First post. A short story I need help on. (Edited a bit)
- Part 2
- hopeless, godless, penniless, worthless,
- another critiquing thread please! 1-10 again.
- please critique this from a scale of 1-10
- Roses Peace Warrior
- So, is this NOT the "please review me" place?
- I'm Quite Fond of This One (R)
- This One is Called "Come To"
- Another word for "usable"
- Please critique - short story
- Short story posting question...
- Chapter 13 in the Cass Holding mystery.
- First part of my 'fantasy' story
- Melba
- (deleted - moved to Fiction)
- Please let me know what you think
- help
- Critiques on a new Project?
- short story about winter 4 english class what do you think?
- Of Dragons & Destinies
- stuck(advice)
- A Certain Slant of Light: Chapter One
- travelling man-part2
- Just in Time for the Holidays: CHAPTER 12
- Nameless
- Essay help. Please??
- Just some questions for story/plot
- What do you make of this one?
- Please read and tell me what you think.
- Please critique. Start of story
- Hello Again>> Need Alot of Help
- A Love Letter Version 2
- Happy WRITING holidays
- Victim of the Mind- First Story
- Statuettes
- Emptiness
- Souls Entwined
- Nightmare
- Island issues
- Start of story
- "Elevators, Ears, and an Ex-Beatle"
- Instalment No.2: My Autobiography
- TfaUC Chapter Four!
- Critique, anyone?
- An apology note via email