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- Revised and more of the story
- help me name my character!!!
- I just was curious...
- Still a few kinks (part 4)
- the opening yet again
- Introduction of the main villain (not for the squeamish)
- Plagerism
- Follow up to "Some Dialogue"
- Falling Between the Cracks
- Imagine Parody
- The Unfulfilled
- History paper: letter about Gallipoli
- First paragraph...
- Riders of the Realm preveiw, TOTALLY revised
- Freedom, A short story (Is not done, I need help,)
- ww3
- I want advice, nothing more
- My setting
- A perfect score on the SAT? WTF?
- Childhood - First writting
- started my story today
- Alliteration
- How to write a Press Release.
- Clash
- Still a few kinks... (Parts 2 and 3)
- Househunters
- The secret
- Imagination
- Poem, good? bad? pros? cons?
- No Death, No Money
- Snatch and Grab (Hard SF)
- Food for thought (short story)
- my history paper (not completed)
- Short Story - Grandpa's Visit
- How does this work for a chase scene?
- cliche, yes, but well written? (600 words) (flash fiction)
- How does this look for a story intro?
- Schoolgirl Confessions (Updated)
- Um...I can't think of a name so this will do.
- The Burning (working)
- Sometimes People Change (part 3: The End)
- The Midriff High School Incident: Threat Analysis Report
- Name help
- Point of view question
- Some dialogue
- This Stranger
- The Bagel War - Completely and Totally Unfinished
- The Machine
- The Epic of Rotnemrot
- My First Sonnet EVER...(Revised)...The Rose Garden
- Bloody Colds (internet humour column FAILURE)
- Still a few kinks (Chapter 1—it's segmented now)
- Into the Black
- Eyes Shut, Eyes Open
- Internet Banking (humour column attempt)
- Second chance
- Enchanter's Dreams
- Forgotten
- Frossty Thoughts - Western Themed
- A Fatal Desire
- A short piece (revised. 698 words. Mainstream)
- story set in hospital
- Bamboo with a Hundred Segments
- No pain
- children's book
- The setting is of a futuristic, dystopian society.
- Six Shots
- (Warning: profanity, etc.) (1000 words) REVISED
- Challenger - First post - let me have it
- Married But Looking- short story
- Affairs of a Married Woman: Roman (warning kind of graphic)
- Loneliness
- Sometimes People Change (part 2)(1st prt. is in shrt. st.)
- novel excerpt (untitled)
- Jack the Ripper-Through the Eyes of Evil.
- Boy.
- A Lesson Learned
- Chapter One: Dark Prophecies (updated)
- Twelfth Strike - The Fall
- 'Hunting on the River of Sand' - contemporary, 2171 wc
- 'The Photo and the Colt' - contemporary, 2965 wc
- Untitled Wolfe Project (File13 salvage)
- A Clockwork Orange
- evaluate "Prayer"
- Fantasy Novel-Prologue
- Frossty Thoughts - Shadow and Light
- post here or what?
- Luck -a short story
- Introduction Paragraphs
- ( Iliad Retelling ) Prologue ( repost)
- Stupid Question about this board
- Frossty Thoughts #1
- Frossty Thoughts #2
- Problems with my Prologue
- Final Recollections (not the solid title?)
- A short piece
- let me know what you think. there is some profanity.
- Confused
- creepy night scene
- so I rewrote my opening...
- Disappearing Act
- Hello everyone, my essay could use a lookover
- Memories
- Working title ( Living on the Edge )
- Ummm...Question?
- Run
- a day of madness...
- When Life and Death Collide (last draft pretty much)
- im stuck
- my opening with a transition
- Shunin: Blade of the Devil
- Musings of the prodigal son returned home
- I am hoping to publish this poem soon. Hoping it will do....
- Twelfth Strike (UPDATED)
- Character Analysis of Daisy from The Great Gatsby
- School essay; need assistance.
- Romeo Must Die
- Cass Holding Strikes Back, Verbally...
- The use of 'that'.
- Boy in a Bubble
- Kali Tradition. "I would like to know if this works??&q
- More Thanmortis.
- Carrion Field pg. One
- The Final Hours
- Joshua Cross - a rudimentary opening chapter
- The Final Hours
- Today I woke up to hear a buzzing sound in my room
- McDonalds Psychic
- Columbine in 215 words [so far]
- HELP!
- Mark & Clark (Chapter 2) ~~ You know what to do ^_^
- Night Rose
- The Battle of Thanmortis.
- The Organization (added more 2/17)
- My first short story!
- My First Long Short Story... Let me know what you think...
- Needing grammar/content help on short Description essay
- young adult short story
- First Battle
- One=Ugh
- Suicide note (rewritten)
- Life Untitled (2)
- School Of Darkness
- The end of the world (updated 2/16)
- begining a work to improve my writing - please C & C
- Assassin (valentine's day update)
- By the Cold Clear Waters (Re-envisioned)
- Help! Which perspective is this written from?
- Mark & Clark---~ Need Adive.. LOTS OF!!! Not good.. I kn
- Please review
- Blue Eyed Euphoria, chap. 2 (short)
- My first speed write
- Forever - Prologue
- Hello everyone can anyone please check out my essay
- deleted
- Umbrellas in the snow (new ending)
- So good or no good?
- Mind Blood -- Stream of Consciousness
- Help?
- Started today.. Don't know how to.. piece together.
- Dialog
- Marian's Angel(working title): Chapter 1, part 1
- English Professors
- deleted
- Kitty Kisses
- Critique Away...
- Telling her how I feel.
- A Certain Slant of Light-Revised 2/8/05
- Is this a monologue?
- For Freedom and glory (update 3/15)
- By the Cold, Clear Waters (tentative opener)
- Stanley Kowalski
- Stockings
- Imprints in the Sand
- new sonnet -- does it work?
- Pointers on dialog?
- Furnace
- Confessions
- Roses...
- His Days Are Numbered...revised
- An Untimely Chain of Events...
- Suggestion for posting.
- Chapter One: Dark Prophecies
- Proof Read Topic Sentence
- Screenplay: The Lady in the Painting.
- Afterwards
- Opening paragraph. What do you think?
- First stab on these forums...
- First Tear - Please critique!
- All I Ask
- The Hill - Please critique.
- (Now much more than) An opening paragraph....any good?
- Endless Tides - please critique.
- A superior species - Please critique!
- A monologue, please critique!
- What happens when the ink runs dry?
- To Kill a Queen--Added More
- FRENCH RESISTANCE STORY pt. 4
- Short story -- Muse
- Short Sci-fi story
- 2491: Commencement of the Prophecies, A Story Line
- Hello
- Humor piece
- Mean tricks
- Potential?
- Tales from an Urban Cockroach - Chapter 5
- Chapter Fifteen in the Cass Holding mystery novel
- Critique for a report
- Prologue for new story (314 words)
- The Atlantic
- Shunin : Blade of the Devil
- To My Love
- Try Again (Opening)
- Three-part thesis statement
- Little something
- New to writing - critique would be great
- what's your take?
- Looking for Opinions/Critiques
- just started this today... worth continuing?
- Guilty Until Proven Innocent
- preventing awake
- On Her Way...
- new writer feeling unsure
- Request for Critique/Poof read
- 1st written work shared here (medical descriptions feature)
- Mindless chatter of freedom
- some future war story
- A Certain Slant of Light (The Real Chapter One)
- Fairpine (working)
- sonnet - lovely dream
- the best feeling
- The Words Just Stopped....
- untitled
- How Hamlet Got His Groove Back.
- A little help would be appreciated
- Chapter Fourteen
- Geoge Orwell First Timer
- End of Chapter Four... But first...
- Untitled [revised]
- Dimond Blades. My first real story
- Awaiting Audry
- ~WANTED-----> help!!
- Aztec
- Inevitability for Sale
- Keepers of the Dark
- Help on an Assassination
- How am I doing so far?
- Angel
- Bowling for Bush
- monster2