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- First chapter of a fantasy for review part 2
- Blood of the Guardian
- Short Essay, Please Critque.
- Elizabethan Sonnet
- Jasmine's Ghost
- Quotes
- Critique Please
- My Short Story; I have writers block
- Picking up the Pieces
- Two scenes from a larger story, featuring greed, lust, courage, some orcs plus a vamp
- Comic Prolouge
- The Crystal
- Distressed
- Lucifer
- My fictionpress account...
- Prologue for Harbingers of Desolation
- How's this for a beginning?
- Memory Scene I hope to use in my story.
- A fight scene
- A brief little scene I'd like to use as the start of my story
- Birth from a Death - please critique.
- A Lost Kitten Found - The Most Recent Draft
- First chapter of a fantasy for review
- The Astherian Princess - Repost
- plot advice?
- short exerpt from chick lit novel! no title yet
- The Hunter (Warning, kinda long)
- Always Watching
- Falling, Chapter 1: A Name
- I don't have a name, but this is a mystery/thriller type of book
- Lion in the Wind - Rewritten intro
- Submitted for thoughts.....
- The Hunter Series - Volume 5
- Snippets from my fantasy novel - comments please
- Beach try #2
- Tisipo:Book Two:Chapter Nine
- a work in progress
- A piece of my current work rough draft
- Call me ( my short piece- the indentations are messed up)
- Diverted Path of Protection
- Writing again, criticism please
- Falling
- Bound by Honor
- Critique This Please
- The Astherian Princess
- no one gets to know (chapter one, sort of)
- How's my Feast? Detailed enough?
- Harbingers of Desolation chaper one part 2
- Descriptive writing exercise, need your review
- Daniel Everett - Arriving At Ramada
- Help on novel
- Maggots of the Earth, continued...
- Untitled Part 1 - opinions, advice, help please.
- Harbingers of Desolation Part I
- Had an idea of a fantasy story, but did'nt know how to start
- O Fyodor
- A Dame to Die For
- Untitled
- A bunch of crazy journal entries and writings
- A tiny sample ( I haven't the slightest Idea what I'm doing so yea...)
- 5 Finger Discount - critique please, advice, anything :)
- Story chaper one
- The Steel Storm Chapter 4 (Sci-fi, Adventure)
- A Small Sample
- Slice Of Pie From Kitchen
- The Battle of the Fjord
- What lies beyond
- Tisipo: Book Two: Chapter Eight
- Rhythm problem
- Origin Of Legends
- Cursed till Dawn
- Flames on Those Steps
- Research Question
- A Lost Kitten Found
- Tordelle and Rask
- The Monster's Revenge
- Lesser Oppression (Opinions/Criticism welcome :)
- Untarnished Fragment
- Looking For Co-Author
- If You Are Having Problems Writing Your Story...
- Indefinate Saviour
- Death in Darkness
- What lies beyond
- check up? longg! (thanks)
- Alright, guys...tear it to shreds!
- Want some critique on your story?
- Dieing Behind the Pen
- Help on First Person Writing
- Please help with odessey essay
- Read At Own Risk
- College Application essay!!!!
- Tisipo: Book Two: Chapter 7
- Working Title: A See-Saw High
- Village to Central Park
- Maggots of the Earth (working title) eager for feedback
- Ryu (Sci-fi)
- A day at the beach
- Essence
- Need some friendly advice
- Ch. 1 (draft-ish) Please Critique
- THE COLD HOUSE- critique please
- Heavy Metal 3
- Blasphemy: chapter 1. Please R&R
- hey, im nick...new guy. i need help!!lol
- help on story..
- To Live On in Legend
- Daniel Everett - The Night With Carla (Chapter 5)
- A Breath Of Fresh Air
- Character help please
- help ! crits/advice/chat
- The March. Come pull it apart guys, I want to learn!
- Wolf of Sakra(Version 2! :D) Now in first person. Please critique.
- The Twenty-Fifth Hour Ch. 1
- havnt posted anything in awhile
- My first entry - opinions please?
- Short Story Intro
- Bleed Like Me - R&R, please.
- Lights Out: Scene 1
- Unfinished so far. About 2000 words.
- Lovesong (repost)
- Prologue Help
- First part of Chapter one
- One Step Ahead
- Help! with Novels
- Help! new inspiration needed
- Heavy Metal-2
- What Could Have Been (english assignment)
- A mangled sentence.
- The Reminance Of Legends- Need Some advice!!
- The Steel Storm Chapter 3 (ReDone)
- Attack of the commas.
- Creativity
- Heavy Metal-1
- Critique for sci-fi maniacs thing.
- TMOT - TakeTwo
- Emergency!!!
- Website Review
- How to make writing "flow"
- sink your teeth into this one
- malaise - short extract
- Looking for Suggestions [random extracts]
- Some Good Bed-Side Reading Part II
- Cuban Escape
- Too new
- Need Help! Please read!
- Creature Comforts
- Discouraged New Member -- Was it that bad?
- Testament of the Spirit of Death
- Tips on writers block
- Wolf of Sakra. Please review.
- One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest: Character Analysis
- You can do anything (R rated 1.2pg)
- Interesting start? Part 23
- Legacy of Power; Beginnings- (Fantasy Adventure Novel)
- Breakiron (a possible opener)
- Epistolary Short
- Making up for lost time
- Is this Sci-Fi-ish storyline at all interesting to you?
- Prologue - would you want to read more of this story?
- Sneak Peak - Lion of the Stars - Book 5!!
- Would you read on?
- Shine City - A novel
- Into Love Prologue
- A Drop of Wine for My Existence
- New member, first post
- Proven Innocence
- Flood My Ears (with your critique)
- Interesting start? Part 22
- The Kappa 2 - 2.7k
- poetry help
- Sunjion Valley
- The Most Epic of Epics ever Created
- Prologue to (another) Story
- I'm New! [feedback needed]
- Chronos Passages 1&2
- Help!
- The Steel Storm Chapter 3
- Fantasy Races
- 5 songs
- That The Night
- Lost
- }no name{
- To be, or not to be? And other questions.
- A question about poem structure/subject.
- Random files.
- Is this emotional enough, or can I do better?
- please help
- Paulateau
- A Horse Is a Horse, Of Course (2000 words)
- USE OF ITALICS QUESTION
- Who Remembers Lisa Ray?
- Interesting start? Part 21 2.8k
- Interesting start? Part 20 1k
- The Imperfect Drug (actual story)
- Rush - The Imperfect Drug of Inimic (Help Me)
- Lack of Confidence? Not sure what to write? (questions)
- New Story, Tree Man
- The Kappa
- Interesting start? Part 19 - 1.4k
- Interesting start? Part 18 - 2k
- ok, more crap, sorry...
- Gravija. (page 1) Open Discussion.
- Childrens story - help!!!!
- The start of a sci-fi story
- Newspaper column...
- Rose in vitro - Chapter 2
- Daniel Everett - Making It To Syracuse
- Chapter One -- Revised
- Prologue of the Demon's Jar. Crit. Please. Thanks
- Extended Definition Assignment-370
- The Steel Storm: Chapter 2
- A Nervous Kind of Peace - Need advice!
- Hello
- Interesting start? Part 17 DELETED
- aftermath
- Baba-Yaga
- Movie Review
- Threat of Decency- Darkness with a twist of lemon!!
- Interesting start? Part 16 DELETED
- The Steel Storm: Chapter 1
- Skeleton Games (PLEASE CRITIQUE!!!)
- PSTO (Prologue + Ch. 1)
- Interesting start? Part 15 DELETED
- Story about the Afterlife
- New to writing
- Help with topic
- Help on writing
- I Need Help With Picking A Creative Domain Name
- Kung-fu story. ch1. pt. 3
- Thou Shall not Breed.
- Black Oil. Screwed up family in backwoods bayou of Louisiana
- MMO idea (well story)....Kill it crits!
- The White Room.
- Interesting start? Part 13 & 14 DELETED
- Trick or Treat (poem)
- kung-fu story, ch1 excerpt 2. Any advice?
- The Vesparels
- Interesting start? Part 12 DELETED
- cut
- Interesting start? Parts 10 &11 DELETED
- Ever Written a Newsletter?
- Robotic Connfessions(crits please)
- Interesting start? Part Nine - DELETED
- Uh... Announcement
- Help on descripitive paper
- Chapter one of practice book (critique please)
- Content
- Arcanum
- Bloody Nachos
- Interesting start/ Part Eight - DELETED