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- Sol Incursion - General Introduction
- My current work .....
- Publishing America: Manuscript Testing
- Project Archangel, an excerpt
- Longer Story this time, would like som feedback
- First few pages of something long.
- Le Paradis (Critique please)
- Aspiring screenwriter wants your constructive criticism
- Project Archangel
- Travesty: A letter to the editor
- Ideas???
- Dance of Death
- 2 Broad Project Ideas .....
- Sol Incursion - Time for Work
- Untitled project
- The Shadow
- The Hive (final version)
- First draft of personal essay
- The library
- What do you think I should change?
- Perspective
- Untitled
- Help please
- Nothing... (Narrative)
- Disarrayed
- Timetravel and Timelines
- Which title would you go with?
- In need of help. Please help.
- Hamlet Article Advice Needed
- The First day of Regret (Pt 4)
- Ben ~chapter two
- Ben ~chapter two
- Reading Material
- Shiron Mountain Ch2
- Shiron Mountain Ch.1
- Job and Emily Part II
- untitled short story
- The first day of regret (Pt 3)
- Sol Incursion - Rough Draft
- Leaving the Set
- The First Day of Regret (Pt 2)
- Leaf Boy---short narrative piece
- S.S.Sherry
- Sol Incursion - Prologue
- Need some help with a bit of dialogue; 774 words
- First Story part 1
- A Bad Day: "You" and "I"
- First Post
- The Knights of Falor
- 2 Prophecies
- First time
- The Dias Chapter 1 Part 2
- Need a critique of non-fiction memoir.
- Need 1st Vs 3rd Person POV critique
- critique... just another in the flock
- Revised (CRITIQUE PLEASE!)
- completed work, 50,000 + words?
- The Flea Circus
- Dundale a chapter of my book
- Princess Chelsea
- Please read and comment
- Untitled for the Moment
- Please help? Got a few hours to finish this.
- Critique Please!
- The Fires of War
- Agazed
- critique my begining?
- The first day of regret
- Givinci's Automotive Horse
- Critiques?
- Four Stories (title,
- need a thesis topic
- A story that I am in the process of writing
- The Watcher by the sea (??)
- forty one years past
- from my personal journal ( after meeting my father )
- Did I get the point across?
- Writing Style
- Tears - Crits wanted
- I dream of Death (part 2)
- Old is lost, new is found...
- english essay for critique
- The trouble with Villains
- How Far Can You Go?
- Treasure Island Thesis Help
- The Dias (first 2000 words or so)
- A Hero's Ransom - Ch 1
- Just a short one!
- Need some advice on War
- Work in progress
- Birdsong [completed]
- Dark Operations: Area 51 - Chapter One (Looking For Advice)
- Avaticus (Story)
- Chap 2 continuation of Girl in the glade
- Random exert from potential story
- Impulse
- Spring Winters
- My attempt at a story in journal form
- Working title: Selenium, Chapter 4
- Chap 1: The Girl in the Glade
- Astrya Chapter 5 The Furnace
- From the Depths of Hades.
- Chapter 6
- Help! Help! MLA Help Needed...
- September 11th (Journal Entries for School)
- Advice needed please!
- Working title: Selenium, Chapter 3
- Working title: Selenium, Chapter 2
- Le Dóchas, Mairim (historical fiction)
- Working title: Selenium (SF Genre)
- Reality Undefined
- UPDATE!!! Chap One of my Autobiography
- Writing tip - go fast or go slow?
- Paper's grammar problems?
- Where the Wild Roses Grow
- Some critique? (I have no title yet)
- What's wrong with this unfinished short story?
- About That Debate Over The Use of Semicolons
- Chapter 3 (Anatomy of Melancholy)
- Animal
- High-five etiquette
- Animation, Actually
- Please read my essay on a famous quote! XD
- i hate beer, i love soda (some language)
- Neo-Imperialism: Why it Rocks. (what do you think?)
- Victims of terrorism
- first 'happy' story.. please read!
- The Universal Link - Prologue (Draft 2)
- retorts of happiness
- Chapter 2 (Anatomy of Melancholy)-340 words
- Afterglow Prologue
- In a meadow/First kiss/The sand...
- Fantasy Idea
- My first short story(well, part of it anyway)
- Very Short Story - Round Shapes Talking.
- Farting bunnies chapter 2
- "Mercury" Prolouge
- plot change??
- The Undoing
- The Hunt
- Here goes Nothing...
- Controlling Idea Essay Critique
- Song Lyrics?
- Question...
- "The Depths of my Stupidity"
- (different) more gattaca stuffs :P
- Writing a novel, need critique so far...
- I have a problem with fantasy cliches
- Birdsong [unfinished]
- Death Moutain Part 1 of part 1
- Farting Bunnies
- Too many characters - help!
- Gattaca - film review - HELP!
- Looking for some feedback on this English paper I have due tomorrow
- Slow Melt
- small part of a story, just want to know what people think
- Beginning of The Media is Responsible for Eating Disorders *editted*
- Seeking a critique of style (~360 words)
- Looking for some help- A.S.A.P :)
- Alan Colmes, I Grieve for Thee
- Unfinished Short Story (Caution: New Writer Here)
- Chapter 1 (An Anatomy of Melancholy)...A Bit Graphic.
- Unfinished short (723 words)
- The Media is Responsible for Eating disorders (argument, only the beginning)
- Young Royalty
- My own Biography - CoMMENTS PLEASE
- overboard catches worth it?
- One of the Keys to Success
- The Dreamer(Working title, ~2000 words)
- Ben ~chapter one
- If You Were Thrown In Prison...
- Porcene Iv story posts only
- The Last - short fiction
- Cast a Lot to the Travels you Choose (warning:graphic)
- Romantic Fantasy - Chapter 2 Excerpt
- Leading the Leaders
- Untitled story chapter 1
- Eavesdropping (800 words)
- A Snippet of ACON
- Harsis ultra - end of CH 2
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 Part F
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 Part E
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 Part D
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 Part C
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 Part B
- A Song Of Plagues Suite 1 part A
- A Song Of Plagues Prologue (950 words)
- Mandala World+The Farmer and the Naga
- First person story clip for style review.
- Starshower (Fin)
- Starshower (Part 2)
- Starshower (Part 1)
- diamond in the rough (cliche, i know)
- Texas Accent help
- The Cold Winter Night
- Listen - ~950 words
- someone please help me with my essay!!
- The Hooker
- My Big Nasty Dilemma
- The Hit
- A Double Take (poem, please help.)
- the hunt
- Beginning of an essay.
- Project Vectus
- Are These Two Paragraphs Confusing?
- The Assignment
- Exposed (incomplete)
- April Fools--
- Forum Story, Porcene IV
- "The blood orange" a creative non-fiction (1600 words)
- Rip it up.....:)
- The Taursporter (2500 words, modern fantasy)
- Sol Incursion - First Edit
- Rebounds Never Last
- Eat the Path (2200 words; unclassified genre)
- My story "White Collar"
- The Loneliness
- Always the Asians-2k-Warning-naughty words!
- Lady Liberty (500 Words)
- Twist Endings
- The Simple Men - Chapter One
- The Clown- Part I
- Masumi Returns Home: Chapter One/Part One
- I dream of death
- chocolate snake
- Darksong's Bane - Rewrite (violence)
- Romantic Fantasy Re-write
- Alright, what do you guys think of THIS idea?
- Happy Hour - Script for a Horror Movie
- This is a bit from my 600 page book - The Shadow Man - Your thoughts?
- Anybody feel like helping a character development?
- 8 Minutes......
- I seem to have lost my marbles.
- Legacy of a Heretic, Book 1 The M'yen Caste, parts 1-4
- alchemist
- A Starving Suspicion
- Whatever Leads You Home Ch.1- Critique Please
- death (a poem; any thoughts)
- Wondering if I should even bother revising...
- Please help with this piece
- Two Halves
- would you read more...
- Three chapter short story...
- Doesn't my poem suck? (Seriously)
- Please, help my school newspaper.
- Narrative Novels
- Introductory scene in a fantasy piece...love to hear back from y'all
- Introduce Syracuse, Hail to the Thief. Chapter one, part one (Adult Content)
- What is it good for? Prologue
- Seasons in Second Person. LIKE SECOND PERSON.