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- How's my writing?
- An attempt to make you laugh, what do you think?
- Non-fiction Article -- help!
- Fantasy. Please Critique.
- Amana Chapter 1 (910 words)
- Need some advice on a possible story
- critique this, please
- Tommy (1,125 words)
- noir story
- Forsaken
- Interview
- Short
- Zeladon's Tale-Chap 1 (Part II)
- GRANDPA (Chapter Two)
- The Martyr
- Short piece
- The Fallen I (tragedy sf) 1500 words --hook opener to a far-future earth story
- Relics I (1600 words)--gothic horror
- The Wandering Jew II--Last days (2000 words)
- The Wandering Jew I--Last days (2000 words)
- The Wailing Humpback (2500 words)--gothic horror
- GRANDPA (Chapter one)
- Phantom
- Zeladon's Tale- Chapter 1 (Part I)
- If We Were An Octopus (1. Introduction)
- Chasing Dakota - Preliminary Chapter One
- I’m sorry doctor; you’ll have to say that again.
- Pardon doctor, you say I’m deaf
- Natural Rights: To Salvage or Sacrifice? (Research paper: drafting process)
- Help With Making Charecters More "Human"
- Flap Jack
- Just looking for some opinions........
- voodoo people: part 2
- Apex: first few chapters
- Fade Together- Chapter One: The Crash
- Death wears combat boots (719 words)
- voodoo people (caution rating)
- first part of my story... what do you think?
- Waiting, Sarah.
- A little more of Heaven Help Us
- Caduceus & cross Chapters 1-3
- practice book: sci-fi genre
- Backstory
- Land of Tolerance
- Epsilon, chapter 1
- Casa Diablo & Program
- Can't figure out Plot
- Feels Awkward (Angels of Opesa)
- Hand of Doom- action sci-fi 1500 words
- Gloving_Country(Appox. 1300 words)
- non-fiction (gay dope fiends) (content)
- Comfortable
- Angel (title in progress)
- In Need of Catholic Help
- The Bed
- Whispers of the Forgotten (1407 words) Fiction
- bunny man.
- Zeladon's Tale- Chapter 1: Shrouded Speculation
- Kailin - Chapter 2
- authors working on title
- Heaven Help Us
- So unlike you
- Chapter One: Greg Jennings
- I fell but it wasn't the same.
- my last dream
- Magical Worm dance
- Vatican City
- school assignment
- Copy_Written Work for Critique.
- Kailin - Chapter 1
- Supremacy - Dramatic Elements
- When B.F.F. Grow Up
- An Empty World (Pathos, 355 words)
- Working Title- Chapter 1 and 2. 1,456 Words.
- school assignment
- Chapter one: Commencing Relations with Barrows
- Sanity Rides Tonight
- Truth - 305 words
- A time without Heros
- The Country Curse
- The Good Daughter
- Dead or Dying- 700 words for style
- Random piece
- Homecoming pt. 2 (~800 words, sf)
- Writing this for a class at school...
- The Wise Barber of the Balkans
- Link – Short Story (Fantasy/1500wrds)
- Code: Arachnid part 2
- New Start
- SionTheSoulHunter
- Dragons Legend (Prologue & 1st chapter)
- Sol Incursion - Home Away From Home
- Sol Incursion - Reunion
- Introduction - (Working Title)
- Red - Short (maybe) - 1800 words.
- Chapter I - Mr. Quirly's Invention
- Biography of a Muslim Teen
- Childrens Story
- Drift - Character portrait
- Until Forever Ends - Chapter Six (~500 words)
- Angels and Demons
- Comatose - Chapter One-ish
- The Emerald Isles - Chapter I (Medieval - 1800wrds)
- Sol Incursion - The Beginning of The End
- Xyn - Part IV
- The Curse of Karma
- Dragons' Legend
- Tales of Vivon prt. 2
- Johnny Trombone, now with ++ naughty language.
- The Guest (I need some critique on this)
- question on poems
- Sylph
- Angels of Opesa - Short New Prologue (500 words)
- Tales of Vivion. begining
- The Hunter- need character cirtuque
- Angels of Opesa - Prologue (Help!)
- Two ends of the Same Stick *500 words, intro*
- I Saw Them (rewrite) Chapter 1: 1237 Words
- Homecoming pt. 1 (~500 words, sf)
- Mita of the Sky: II
- 2nd Portfolio Draft, Intro
- Code: Arachnid
- Hearbreak(revised 400 words)
- Help With Draft for my Portfolio
- Attempt at a new style...(Help!)
- Had to get this off my chest, critiques greatly appreciated
- Mita of the sky
- Until Forever Ends - Chapter Five (realistic fic)
- Need some help with ideas...
- Trouble with my Plot
- Excerpt from Carapacho (~770): Please critique
- Help - Hook Sentences / Introductory Paragraphs
- A minstrels tale. (Fantasy, work in progress, 1st chapter. 500+ words)
- A tale of Two Creatures
- "You've changed"
- Dramatic Fiction - Please Help
- Feedback welcomed
- Blackwell Manor: Ch 2/1,875 words
- Jars and Other Things
- 9/11 retrospective (556 words)
- Speech: Attending Class in High School. (5 Par. essay structure)
- Blackwell Manor: Ch 1/2,119 words
- Grade 8, opening paragraphs, 198 words
- Chameleon, short story in 7 parts
- Expat Chapter 2 Part 1 (1056 words)
- Flaw for my character
- Wolf and Twilight
- Illusions of Euphoria - Short Story - 1,300 words. Critique and I'll Return the Favor
- Heartbreak (400 words)
- Comedy Article
- Back Again
- Critique my character...please...
- Goodbye (Really Short)
- Gravity - A Short Story
- An Intriguing Prologue?
- The watcher (356 words)
- Short- Vaguely Surreal Doesn't quite work
- colours in all their wonderful glory!
- Ruth, put your dog up please
- Paragraph seeks clear language
- Hey Andy! (humour-750 wds)
- Need help with a grammar problem!
- Short Story-Need critiquing
- Ride
- blackjack dealer
- Very Short- Style Piece
- Black Hair Won't Heal Your Wounds, Neosporin Will - Short Story - 1350 Words
- Short story for a contest
- homework assignment...
- 'Tomb of the Unknown Hero' - fiery short story (500 words), classical myth
- The Abacus
- Its all about Alopecia
- Full Circle - Chapter Two (again)
- Memoir problem
- Revolution: Ch1/503 words
- does any one now any good grammar cd-roms
- I Saw Them (Intro) 1022 words
- SPAM(my comic)
- "Play it again, Sam."
- I Really Really Need Critique
- The mood
- "Tram Ride" - Short scene
- memoirs-first person, present tense?
- Silence: Ch1/1,697 words
- In company of the Grim Reaper(1,000 words roughly)
- Memoirs of a Blackjack Dealer
- Kailin - Part of a prologue (2700 words)
- Intergalactic, Baby.
- "Everything is Illuminated" letter
- Full Circle -- Chapter Two
- Story snippet: arena scene.
- "Couch"
- "Forever Darkness"...Prologue and Eight Chapters.
- One of Those Days ~ 1000 words ~ General
- Little known Law 803 words sarcastic humor
- Breaking Peace:very low fantasty (1440 words)
- Beast, my first sonnet
- Jury Duty (~2700)
- Living the Path - sort of fiction?
- The Giant's Drink -- sci-fi sort of poem (20 or so lines)
- Expat Chapter 41 - Too many words
- Can someone read this opener to my novel and tell me why it's bad?
- Pick a title.
- Yay or Nay to my query letter?
- Ero-Part2(Much Better version)
- some of my story.
- To end it well? Or not-so-well? A poem (-ish).
- first little bit to a story
- Tell me if this is interesting (version 3) Specific critique questions inside.
- What term(s)/word(s) should I use instead of "to be"?
- Aeon Legacy Chapter 1 Flow Of Blood part Two.
- Need help with Opening paragraph. I have two options
- War Seeker. AD 1521. Siege of Mexico City-Tenochtitlan. 1500 words--hook opener.
- The Champion - fantasy/action (a bit), 2446 words (so far)
- College Entrance Essay
- A Short Story
- Slavery Essay, please help
- A Child of our Time
- A couple of sketches
- The day has arrived (an honest take on family life- 1300 words)
- Past tense?
- Until Forever Ends - Chapter Four (Realistic-Fic)
- Would you buy this or shelf it?
- Ch. 3 of my story
- Big plans
- Just beginning to flesh out a weird story idea
- The Asphodel survivor
- Dark Fairytales - 7 paras from Ch. 4- Fantasy Series
- Chadwin's Restaurant
- You can take a look at one of my songs/stories.
- The beginning: Chapter I/part three
- The beginning: Chapter I/part two
- The beginning: Chapter I/part one
- Family Love- a memoir about growing up in a family with mental illnes
- Does this POV transition clearly?
- The Girl They Loved Too Much
- A poem I wrote a while back.
- Title
- one last attempt
- The Fallen (tragedy sci-fi, 1200 words) --hook opener to a far-future earth story
- Until Forever Ends - Chapter Three
- First time writer. ONE PAGE --I awoke--
- Dragon Court
- Please critique my opener.
- Inspirational Fiction - 1000 words
- Action Scene, Fantasy, crit. on style and tech. appreciated
- The First few paragraphs of my novel
- Gatekeeper's Price ~1660 words, Fantasy
- A tid bit of Writing -
- The accoutant assassination