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- Turn that Bloody Light out – The HMS Fiji’s story - 1500 words
- Crime Causation
- Quick 142 words.
- Life Of A Vampire (please comment... XD !)
- The Watchers (sci-fi, 489 words)
- Talking In The Mirror(temporary Title)
- Roadkill en Route [short story, 1145 words]
- The Last Card in the Pack (First Chapter of a Novel)
- Breaking Away
- Short story, "The Achilles Room" - 4600+ words, "general" fiction, some swearing
- Untitled Story (Any revisions, critique, suggestions, please.)
- Junk Man's Treasure Pile
- Bags [adult content, 1300 words]
- Blokada Leningrada
- Aerial, chap 1 (finished!) 2.5k words
- Untitled
- The Somali Pirate Story
- "Paper, Plastic, Trite?" [originally "Trite", 1001 words, short story]
- The Dream Walker
- Complete chapter I
- BUsh Spirits
- From Within (working title) - chapter 1 (400 words)
- My sci-fi (Untitled)
- Ze Canines! (a humourous short story - unfinished)
- Ode to a Cat A short poem
- Getting it Right
- Rites of Passage, pt. 1 (514 words, Fantasy)
- SHORT STORY: Cold Snow (1200 words)
- bleeding girl(didn't know what else to call it) *disturbing*
- college entrance essay
- On Writing and Butt-holes
- Figuring out the "little" stuff
- N-E Jazz (need critique.
- Explaining coaxial drive - did I do it right?
- Devlin Souls - Chapter One (Fantasy 1300 words)
- Wild - fantasy
- prologue advice
- Gideon
- Aerial, chap 1 (not finished)
- Losing Naomi
- Angel on a Star - Poem
- Leave Me Alone - Letter
- Beginning of sci-fi novel (1000 words)
- The beginning of the end(1250 words)
- basic story any good?
- Re-vision of a possibly finished, possibly unfinished story
- Purple prose? (750 words)
- Beginning of a fantasy story - 750 words
- Narcissism I-Search
- Aerial (working title)
- Cheese please!(20 words)
- Working on a story
- Quick Question!
- No title yet - Poem
- Knife-to-throat-theory *it's not gorey*
- First Chapter of untitled fantasy novel
- Excerpt
- Story opening. Untitled by Kion
- Humour column attempt: Mobile Phones part 1
- This is part of Chapter 1 - untitled novel
- Space Waste (roughly 750 words)
- Warrior (262 words)
- Prologue (340 words)
- Just a beginning 267 words
- The beginning...contd(735 words)
- Brother Godfinger
- Changeling (revised again and edited)
- Changeling
- Givin' it to Rudy
- The beginning(300 words)
- Small fragment- 832 words (updated!)
- Unnamed story
- When Death Quit
- Odd Realities
- Afternoon by the Lake
- So Many Years My Mother [Language]
- Demonic U, work in progress @4000 words (modern horror)
- Two of Us
- New Title
- Advice: Romance
- My work.
- A Bit of my Unnamed novel
- No Egg For Dinner (Poem)
- Afternoon by the Lake (revision)
- Sade - Short Character Creation Exercise (719 Words)
- Isla Perdidas- first chapter
- Into the Cold Air(short story, 950 words)
- Blood Ghost Haunting-The first chapter of my novel.
- The White Rose
- Float
- An idea that needs some input.
- Excerpt from "The Destined," my novel.
- Communicate with Care
- One of my first efforts at writing from a woman's perspective...
- Black Rose
- A Bleak Vignette
- Temple of the Alien (first chapter, first draft)
- Part 1 of a completed short story (3000 words +)
- Fred's Artwork
- A paper I wrote 2 years ago
- Ugh. Please Help.
- The Strangest Dream to Ever Have Been Dreamt
- The fly on the wall sees all
- One-Eye Knight; Chapter Zero Excerpt (745 words)
- Twilight Blue
- Novel In Progress - Excerpt 1 (1200 words)
- Box of Light (approx. 800 words so far)
- The Dedication
- Speculation
- twinsdarkly(Chances Missed): 545 wds
- Excerpt from story
- I Hear the Mezcal is Great Down There- 830, brief sketch
- Chances Missed: 651 wds
- Consumed by Addiction
- Science Fiction Story
- Redneck Madwoman Mama
- Our Dear Sister
- Very Short Sci-Fi Prologue
- Imriel's Dawn Query letter (short)
- Full Circle Chapter Three - 600 words
- The Escort (most of first chapter)
- Falls The Shadow (part 2); 990 words.
- Nothing Much (Just Looking For Advice)
- Brothers
- Are You An Unintentional Plagiarist?
- Revelation pt 1 (approx 2000 words)
- Fantasy:1 scene(1200 words)New writer
- Ten dollars an hour for this??
- Beginning of a fantasy story, looking for some feedback
- Short peice of writing - 219 Words
- The Grail Crossing
- With All the Fire of the Sun (Poem)
- Tales From The Wood - A children's poem, sorta
- verbatim
- Brief Passage
- Falls The Shadow; 2538 words.
- Being A Fool
- Breach For Breach
- Wrote something new...
- Not sure
- Cheezy short-short - 529 words
- Sad Fancies Fret My Mind
- Whispers (890 words so far)
- Your Life is in Your Wallet
- Twilight Song (a poem)
- Essay on campus depression- 1249 words
- A creation poem i've made
- Does it have potential?
- One of my first shots at poetry.
- Winter's Crusade - An attempt at poetry
- Farewell to the West - 375 Words
- Theif's Worthy Cause (671 words)
- Dulce Et Decorum or Duality- Short Story 1,300
- Caveman story (277 words)
- no title as of yet, unfortunatly (500 words)
- piracy (816 words)
- Too much description for setting? (~275 words)
- formation of a band story
- Chapter 3 (Vile Tactics) 475 Words
- Chapter 1 -=Shrouded Speculation=- 1.3k words(Fantasyish)
- What Is It About Human Nature That Makes Us So Flawed
- The Goodbye List
- Regrets (Approximatly 950 words)
- a thought...
- A short scene (The Compound...POSSIBLE SPOILER, I DONT KNOW)
- The Parallel Flames, Part I
- My Sea Urchin
- Practice Writing for Style
- Camryn
- Kyrstal Kincaide
- Short Story
- Until Forever Ends - Chapter Seven (600 words, realistic fiction)
- The Compound
- The mistake (250 words)
- Gesellschaft, Literary Fiction (1,902 words)
- Monkey Bars
- "Beloved" - spiritual, something different
- Bound & Determined...xmynameislisax
- Does this opening work? (350 words)
- Last Lunch With Lily - Harry Buschman
- Another clip to my story...xmynameislisax
- "Rapture" -short story horror-
- It happened in Hanover
- Need Belief(1,700wds)
- Writing partner or mentor needed!
- Please read a clip from my story, and tell me what you think.
- After finding her husband with his mistress...
- The beginning of my book (400 words)
- Scattered Thoughts - 957 words
- Would This Be Copyright?
- Caught(300 words)
- Asinine Characters With Bad Dialogue
- Need critique and title help please
- Critique?
- Short story beginning
- Setting the Stage (short story called "Snap")
- Am I on the right track???
- Does this grip you? (Fantasy)
- WIP, short story into in need of critique
- Looking for criticisms on soon to be published article
- WIP: Color me Green
- Historical Fiction, 1858 Maryland
- Soul
- Flexbile Garphite's 10 laws
- Father and Son(fantasy(1200wds. aprox))
- Help!!!
- "Critique" vs "Writing Tips"
- Your 2 Cents (Pretty Please...)--Part 1
- Inital impressions needed for this v.short piece!!!
- Opening Paragraph, 1st person
- haiku
- Sloth, and Pointless -- freewrite, ~670
- La Belle Caprice - A short piece of historical fiction
- Sci-fi "appendix"
- Question Regarding Language (Offensive)
- Red Morning (Serialized fantasy; Continued 7-7)
- Erotomania: Chapters 1-6
- Opening Paragraph
- The soldier(400 words)
- Anyone like this idea for a story?
- Cyrin II
- Gabrielle Calihan
- Untitled, part a
- 2000 words of the Beginning of a Fantasy Story (A Request)
- Writing 1st person as the opposite sex
- You Bring Me to My Knees
- The Bench
- Which of these titles would catch your attention the most?
- The Axiom of Motherly Love - Poem
- Homebound (Drama? Roughly around 3800 words)[disk]Rough Language[/disk]
- New \
- The Snitch (288 words)
- How do you write teen books?
- The Resurrection of Able Harper, Prologue (Historical Fict.- 1890's; 1500 words)
- dialogue problem
- Please help me critique this piece.
- Could someone help me?
- Innocence and Vengeance
- Roses for Alimony
- Video Game Review
- Creative Dump? collecting of my pieces of writing
- The Companions (Working Title ~ 920 words)
- Chapter 1 - Spec Ops
- Descriptive Essay 410 words Proofread please
- Question: Do I need an agent under my circumstances?
- A Segment of Chapter 3 (Short 380 Words)
- My Synopsis!
- Between the Lines, short story ch 1, 900w
- The Sins Of The Father (Title may be changed)
- Inhibition - Ficiton - 1,067 words