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- The game of life
- Untitled Demon Fiction
- Ruby Tuesday (fantasy/adventure/romance)
- Childhood Evils Revised
- The Thirteenth of Never
- The First Nightmare (~1100 words)
- College Essay
- Poetry Contest
- Untitled and brand new!
- Fantasy book/story in the works...
- Advice on a collaborative project
- A LIFE OF A SNITCH (a contract story / 792 words)
- mindlessness
- Tales of the Nameless: Preludes of Dissonance (Part 1)
- Short Story: South of Heaven
- The Ride to Oblivion (125 words, horror, abandoned and incomplete)
- am i making a fool of myself?
- My script(6 pages, Please review))
- Jw Finds God At Oktoberfest Part 1 - Travel Story. Some Bad Words.
- Fragile (seeking critiques on my latest piece)
- Hunger
- Peace & War: A Journal Entry
- Seeking advice for 3 vignettes
- Feedback please!
- Memoir(100 words)
- First draft Synopsis
- The life(200 words)
- Fantasy/action story, plot twist help
- Story Start new member seeking constructive critism and advice on writing disipline
- Little help?
- First Try ....
- The Observer (Revision, 453 words)
- Help!
- Help With A Name
- Misericord
- Help devise a plot
- Kingdom Hearts 2 US Final Mix Petition (needs editing)
- The Field Alexander--Realistic Fiction--Excerpt
- Terminals at Rush Hour
- I committed suicide!
- Show your work
- Scene 3 draft from a project
- HumanKIND 1 (6 page sample script)
- First time poster posting poem in need of critique!
- Cloaked Dreams
- An unfinished idea
- Jump (super-short story - only 410 words)
- Trying something different...
- small work
- Dark~Blood
- Amour (plz critique)
- Delete (Por Favor).
- Huzzah! Brand New Chapter 1! (Pt 1/4)-Fantasy story
- Language and grammer
- Attempting to do more with less.
- Critique this.
- Tester paragraph (316 words)
- Acher of Kalamine: Prologe
- The Esra Tree, Chapter 1. My First Story.
- Reject
- Need help cleaning up a narative
- I'm so screwed...
- Reading between the lines
- The meeting(500 words) revised
- Untitled - 300 words
- The Green Skies of Jeezerism (about 1,000 words)
- Basic books on different styles/methods of writing and writers.
- Tension(340 words)
- No Shadow in April
- Mine Together [1500 Words] [LANGUAGE]
- New fiction for me - what do you think?
- Zealous passion for writing
- Strange World
- The meeting(500 words)
- Execution
- Untitled semi-rough draft of a story
- I need advice on a story
- Hours of the Day : chapter 1
- Eye(flash: 539wds)
- Orbis - First Draft and i feel really low about it
- Long Hiatus, Short Piece
- The Gate and the Guardian - Action sequence help
- April Fools
- escapes
- Huzzah! Fantasy Story! -=Chapter 1=- Tommy (pt1.)
- more of the Yakamona chronicles
- I hate writing formal letters
- Six Months Along
- Essay needing advice
- no good title yet :\
- Character differentiation(400 words)
- POV(200 words)
- The Circle of Congregation
- The Yakamona chronicles. book one. the chosen. prolouge.1,100 words
- The Yakamona chronicles. book one. the chosen. prolouge.1,100 words
- "Shibuya"
- Stormy Night Lullaby
- The Forbidden Elevator(chapter one, YA Fantasy)
- *Insert Witty Title here*
- An exerpt from "Fatal Embrace"
- Stormy Shakedown
- A Devine Purpose (Conclusion Chap 1) 228 words
- Excerpt: Cancer man(800 words)
- Dust (revised)
- Puppet
- A Devine Purpose (Majority of Chap. 1) 2250 words
- Imagery(260 words)
- Dust
- One Step Toward Rock Bottom (story)
- Turn that Bloody Light out – The HMS Fiji’s story - 1500 words
- Crime Causation
- Quick 142 words.
- Life Of A Vampire (please comment... XD !)
- The Watchers (sci-fi, 489 words)
- Talking In The Mirror(temporary Title)
- Roadkill en Route [short story, 1145 words]
- The Last Card in the Pack (First Chapter of a Novel)
- Breaking Away
- Short story, "The Achilles Room" - 4600+ words, "general" fiction, some swearing
- Untitled Story (Any revisions, critique, suggestions, please.)
- Junk Man's Treasure Pile
- Bags [adult content, 1300 words]
- Blokada Leningrada
- Aerial, chap 1 (finished!) 2.5k words
- Untitled
- The Somali Pirate Story
- "Paper, Plastic, Trite?" [originally "Trite", 1001 words, short story]
- The Dream Walker
- Complete chapter I
- BUsh Spirits
- From Within (working title) - chapter 1 (400 words)
- My sci-fi (Untitled)
- Ze Canines! (a humourous short story - unfinished)
- Ode to a Cat A short poem
- Getting it Right
- Rites of Passage, pt. 1 (514 words, Fantasy)
- SHORT STORY: Cold Snow (1200 words)
- bleeding girl(didn't know what else to call it) *disturbing*
- college entrance essay
- On Writing and Butt-holes
- Figuring out the "little" stuff
- N-E Jazz (need critique.
- Explaining coaxial drive - did I do it right?
- Devlin Souls - Chapter One (Fantasy 1300 words)
- Wild - fantasy
- prologue advice
- Gideon
- Aerial, chap 1 (not finished)
- Losing Naomi
- Angel on a Star - Poem
- Leave Me Alone - Letter
- Beginning of sci-fi novel (1000 words)
- The beginning of the end(1250 words)
- basic story any good?
- Re-vision of a possibly finished, possibly unfinished story
- Purple prose? (750 words)
- Beginning of a fantasy story - 750 words
- Narcissism I-Search
- Aerial (working title)
- Cheese please!(20 words)
- Working on a story
- Quick Question!
- No title yet - Poem
- Knife-to-throat-theory *it's not gorey*
- First Chapter of untitled fantasy novel
- Excerpt
- Story opening. Untitled by Kion
- Humour column attempt: Mobile Phones part 1
- This is part of Chapter 1 - untitled novel
- Space Waste (roughly 750 words)
- Warrior (262 words)
- Prologue (340 words)
- Just a beginning 267 words
- The beginning...contd(735 words)
- Brother Godfinger
- Changeling (revised again and edited)
- Changeling
- Givin' it to Rudy
- The beginning(300 words)
- Small fragment- 832 words (updated!)
- Unnamed story
- When Death Quit
- Odd Realities
- Afternoon by the Lake
- So Many Years My Mother [Language]
- Demonic U, work in progress @4000 words (modern horror)
- Two of Us
- New Title
- Advice: Romance
- My work.
- A Bit of my Unnamed novel
- No Egg For Dinner (Poem)
- Afternoon by the Lake (revision)
- Sade - Short Character Creation Exercise (719 Words)
- Isla Perdidas- first chapter
- Into the Cold Air(short story, 950 words)
- Blood Ghost Haunting-The first chapter of my novel.
- The White Rose
- Float
- An idea that needs some input.
- Excerpt from "The Destined," my novel.
- Communicate with Care
- One of my first efforts at writing from a woman's perspective...
- Black Rose
- A Bleak Vignette
- Temple of the Alien (first chapter, first draft)
- Part 1 of a completed short story (3000 words +)
- Fred's Artwork
- A paper I wrote 2 years ago
- Ugh. Please Help.
- The Strangest Dream to Ever Have Been Dreamt
- The fly on the wall sees all
- One-Eye Knight; Chapter Zero Excerpt (745 words)
- Twilight Blue
- Novel In Progress - Excerpt 1 (1200 words)
- Box of Light (approx. 800 words so far)
- The Dedication
- Speculation
- twinsdarkly(Chances Missed): 545 wds
- Excerpt from story
- I Hear the Mezcal is Great Down There- 830, brief sketch
- Chances Missed: 651 wds
- Consumed by Addiction
- Science Fiction Story
- Redneck Madwoman Mama
- Our Dear Sister
- Very Short Sci-Fi Prologue
- Imriel's Dawn Query letter (short)
- Full Circle Chapter Three - 600 words
- The Escort (most of first chapter)
- Falls The Shadow (part 2); 990 words.
- Nothing Much (Just Looking For Advice)
- Brothers
- Are You An Unintentional Plagiarist?
- Revelation pt 1 (approx 2000 words)
- Fantasy:1 scene(1200 words)New writer
- Ten dollars an hour for this??
- Beginning of a fantasy story, looking for some feedback
- Short peice of writing - 219 Words
- The Grail Crossing
- With All the Fire of the Sun (Poem)
- Tales From The Wood - A children's poem, sorta
- verbatim
- Brief Passage
- Falls The Shadow; 2538 words.
- Being A Fool
- Breach For Breach
- Wrote something new...
- Not sure
- Cheezy short-short - 529 words