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- The psychology of writers
- Mi Tormento
- Enzeru - Chapter One
- short story
- Come and Came
- My novel start revised - approx 1500 words
- A prologue
- Does this happen to anybody else?
- Anti-Hero
- Hell Inc. Chapter One
- Emergency Executive Summary!
- Introduction.
- Untitled (1063 Words)
- A modern day bit of writing (Rather dark, mainly scene/character building, 588 words)
- Character - 300 words
- Need feedback on my novel - fourth part
- Copywriting Early Drafts
- Need Help with Query Letter
- Fluctuating Writing Skills
- Writing Non-fiction : Outlines
- Chapter Three - The Ruin and Rosed
- Require plot advice
- Please offer advice for my novel - third part
- Forget-Me-Not (Fantasy/Sci Fi, 600 words, Snippet)
- Where do you get your ideas for stories??
- Question regarding submissions
- A possible beginning--keep going?
- Need advice with my novel - second part
- Continuation of "Water" - Does present tense work?
- Fixed vs Shifting Narrative
- Need some advice
- Need small advice on how to continue.
- What do you think of this Scene?
- Motivations for Obedience : A Proper View of God's Commandments.
- Do you write your novel in a logical order?
- Is the Japanese too much?
- On Heroes - Comments Welcome
- Excerpt from experimental novel about a fallen angel
- The Adventures of Fluter Jay Spagakney (my story)
- Second Chapter of my Fantasy Story
- Prologue and First Chapter of my Fantasy Novel: Does it hook the reader?
- which paragraph is better
- Crystal Legends
- life as i know it
- stumped on genre
- A very brief summary of my current story.
- Lucidity (Temporary title)
- My Redrafted Fantasy Story. Please Critique.
- Untitled
- Idyllic Realm, part 3
- Idyllic Realm, part 2
- Idyllic Realm, what do you guys think so far?, part 1
- Gone Again And All (a poem)
- Start of novel--do you think it has potential--any comments welcome
- How many stories at once?
- Jacob's Halloween
- Fool
- Pizza Guy (First try at a longer story)
- See if you can make any sense of this
- Which Idea For A Story Sounds The Most Promising To You?
- Prophetic Fisherman
- Taking Up Reading
- Erotic story help..please. also looking for someone to finish it.
- Dialogue vs Bad Acting?
- The Black Dog
- A new story
- Backstage Pass
- Possible start to Vampire Novel
- Gone Astray -Stabler-
- A good start? Would you read on?
- Short Story: "One Simple Wish"
- Start of novel - should I continue? Would you buy it?
- Mystery Thriller Prologue (907 words)
- Picking up the pace
- Paragraph opinion
- My First Story
- Trinity - Edited & Revamped
- Advice for a very ambitious novel that’s taking ages.
- Short piece.
- The Kelgan Wars : The Wings of the Beast
- Quick question on etiquette
- "ands" or "commas"
- Please comment
- was planning on trashing this, gve me your opinions
- Is this passage effective?
- The Rant About Writing
- Prologue (The Hunter's Prey) My Second novel
- Question? (Please give some advice)
- Another try?
- How far can you go without the hook?
- Arriving in Korea.
- Overcoming Cliche
- Piece in Southern US dialect, need help
- Please be brutal
- A Hopeful Beginning? (1,124 words)
- Atlantis Story (untitled) - Chapter 1
- Short Prologue (365 WORDS)
- Beginning's Publishing
- Need help with Southern American dialect
- They Were Just Silhouettes
- BoD. Chapter 1. Rewritten.
- The Drain
- Critique and Advice :)
- A Tale of Two Schools
- Untitled (work in progress)
- Trinity
- After the Apocalypse (novel start, science fiction)
- Post Euphoria| Reworked Piece
- Red Valkyrie & Winter Wolf (the first summary of the full story)
- Invasion, second draft (fantasy, 2791 words)
- Need Advise with:The Wolfs
- Sunny Day
- First attempt at writing a proper story ---ever!
- Are review services worth it?
- Mother's Day - Very Short
- Creativity Loss??
- How can I find a decent publisher?
- Chapter 1: An end to innocence
- Fantasy Battle Scene - Need critique
- Bond of Darkness - Chapter 4 - The Cry
- Untitled (A short look at a new story I'm working on)
- The Knight Drum [Really Short Story]
- The Knight Drum [Really Short Story]
- Rough Around the Edges (Excerpt)
- Poem "Desire" (Deep Blue Dream)
- please review, want to publish
- [Interactive Story] Questions on genre and tone
- Five Seconds
- The beginning usually isn't the hardest part.
- Flogging a dead horse part 3
- More of the same type, lot's more.
- New writer lookin for critique, worth reading.
- My Poison
- Which is correct?
- Three Blind Mice
- The girl in 12c its rough but I wann know wat u think
- Still untitled (Fantasy)
- Untitled Work of Fiction
- Criticism, please!
- will I have trouble?? a fiction novel but with a real institution
- The encounter(600 words adult content)
- feel like reading?
- Script
- 1st chapter of Witness Protection
- A Study on Vampirism
- Imagine: The Incandesence
- Untitled for now (Fantasy, 400 words)
- The Devil's Angel
- how to make literary work more cinematic?
- Wondering if this idea is coherent. (Will post intro if anyone is interested)
- How bout this for an Intro
- Shades of Black
- Need a little help with this...
- First chapter. Is it a good start
- Eight Years To End the World - sample chapter
- REWORKED: POSSIBLE PROLOGUE
- True Writing
- Bond of Darkness - Chapter Two
- Dawn
- It lied
- Take 'er easy on me
- Flogging a dead horse Part 2
- Am I flogging a dead horse here? part 1
- Layers (flash)
- Edited prologue.
- You make the rest disappear
- The Buck stops here(750 words)
- Writing a Critical Lens Essay...
- Fall From Heaven
- My Latest Attempt at Fiction Writing: The Rimicil Outcast
- French Sally
- Bond of Darkness - My first attempt at fantasy writing.
- Devistating effects of good business
- Prologue and Question
- Starting a novel...
- Cavern
- Severely Need Some Feeback
- What if....?
- Double-feature, as in two books in one
- Intro/Shell of a fantasy novel
- (Western) Valley of Eternal Darkness
- Post apocalyptic fantasy
- Violence on the streets of violence
- My Dilemma
- Should I keep going
- A question (just seeking advice, 'mainly' fantasy based)
- The Americas
- Venus
- Dream Sea (300 words)
- critique for a short story
- Preface to Novel
- 100 word prompt :: Life as a book, blurb
- Untitled intro (1k words) to a story
- check out my query letter bio
- Help me with some inspiration
- The Aviators: Idea Discussion
- the charaters of life before
- the charaters of life after
- The first chapter of a novel I'm attempting to write...
- The Kings of Sports: The long road
- Farewell ditty for Tony
- Does this sound interesting?
- From a blind point of view...
- Opinion -- description of a of a child and his mother's death
- What are the rules on writing about Celebrities?
- Asylum
- Kazhure, my first go at writting fantasy
- Genesol introduction
- Looking for critique - crime fiction script
- Trying somethng new...
- Need advice on what idea to go with
- Novel Introduction
- Comic book synopsis
- And I stared out along the sky.
- Venganza in Vegas
- Long, a dragon's tale
- The Box
- Start of Zombie Story need advice
- Oh no! Is this ok?
- Aesa
- My " I Love You's"
- Giveaway trait of an imposter/clone etc?
- [Essay] All Quiet on the Western Front
- Sort of an inner monologue
- (Religious thriller): Is Paradise denied to me, because I can't take no more
- Azmacna (prologue or story?)
- The Red Letter
- Zenith and Hild, Revision, Chapter 1-Part 1
- Excuse me people of this site... I wrote a poem...
- Thank You, Love (330 words)
- What do you think? (fantasy piece, 1086 words)
- first few line of may first ever book
- Character Descriptions
- I need help with my antagonist/s
- Submissions
- It's a little puzzler (at least it is for me)
- This isn't finished, nor is it titled.
- Travelers Of The Dead
- Wondering if I'm on the right track
- bf poem advice.
- How should the mom die?
- This is so gay...
- Part of my story(Revised).
- Excerpt: Story Introduction
- College Work
- Cold Vacuum (505 words)
- downstairs
- A Dream (883 words)
- A minor dilema
- Fake Calm Within - Poem (297 words)